Sunday, October 17th, 2010 07:49 pm

Title: The ever-living ghost of what once was
Fandom: Hawaii Five-0
Rating: PG
Genre: Gen, angst, friendship
Characters: Kono, mentions of Danny, Steve, Chin
Spoilers/warnings: Implied abuse
Length: 300
: Don’t own. Title comes from Band of Horse’s “No One’s Gonna Love You”
Notes: Written for the new prompt “Scar” over at the drabble community [ profile] hawaii_5_0_100 . It’s like the mods read my mind--I’ve had this idea in my head for awhile. There may be more to this later; not sure yet.

: Scars tell stories; Kono’s not sure she wants to know this one.

Scars tell stories.

Kono thinks of that every time she catches sight of the knife scar on Chin’s chest or the gunshot scars on Steve’s leg and lower back. Those scars attest to the dangers the two have encountered. They’re scars of strength and survival.

Kono’s got her own scars as well. When she was in high school, she and her friends liked to compare scars. Most of them were small, results of wipe outs, klutziness, or just plain stupidity. It had been like a twisted competition: the longer the scar, the greater the glory.

Then she’d blown out her knee and had three surgeries to fix it, and suddenly her scars weren’t about glory any more. No, those scars tell the story of her broken dreams. They’re scars of failure.

And then there’s Danny’s scars.

Kono has only seen Danny’s scars once; even when Five-0 is taking time off to relax at the beach, he’s usually wearing a shirt. But after one particularly messy case that ended with all of them falling into an open sewer, they’d been forced to strip down to their undergarments and hose off at HQ.

As she’d stood shivering under the stream of water, Kono had stared with wide eyes at the crisscross pattern of long, twisted scars on Danny’s back. There’d been at least a dozen, maybe more. Steve and Chin had noticed the marks as well and wanted nothing more than to take a crack at whoever had caused them, judging by the looks Kono had seen on their faces.

But Danny’s never said a word, and no one on the team has ever asked about them, so the origin of those scars remain a secret.

Scars tell stories, Kono knows, but she’s not sure she wants to know this particular tale.



Monday, October 18th, 2010 03:48 am (UTC)
I admit, the first thing that attracted me to this piece was the title. I just started listening to Band of Horses a month or so ago, and I've always been struck by the cryptic simplicity of their lyrics.

And then I saw it was you and I was even more eager to read.

And I was not disappointed. I love that you have Kono's voice telling the story--she's probably the one I'd be least likely to write from--and you have her down so well. I love the insights into what the scars say about each person and that Danny's are still a mystery. Which fits so well with the show so far since he's still the one who somewhat keeps himself at a distance.

Of course, this little snippet makes me want more. Any chance we'll get the real story behind the scars?
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:33 am (UTC)
Aww, thanks so much, friend! That means a lot to me, coming from you. :) Glad you liked it! (And I agree, Band of Horses has some very powerful but simple songs.)

And yes, I'm thinking of trying to develop a story that expands on this. Any chance you'd be interested/have the time to help me out? I think if I had someone to bounce ideas off of (and maybe to actually write with), I'd be far more likely to get something out. :D
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:45 am (UTC)
I'd love to help you out in any way I can! Do you have my email address? I honestly can't recall :)
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:48 am (UTC)
Sweet! That'd be awesome. :D And I must have had your e-mail at one point, because I know you helped me beta something for SPN once, but I don't think I have it any more. But you can e-mail me--mine's just ^_^
Monday, October 18th, 2010 04:00 am (UTC)
Scars tell stories, Kono knows, but she’s not sure she wants to know this particular tale.

Ooh, but I do! I echo [ profile] faye_dartmouth, will we hear any more about this particular backstory?
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:33 am (UTC)
Hee, yes, I think you probably will. Won't make any guarantees, but it's quite likely. :)
Monday, October 18th, 2010 04:01 am (UTC)
Wow... You sure know how to pack a punch. That was really intense and so well written. I loved Kono's voice!
Any chance of a back story to this? Because those sound like he was whipped. And I'm just a sucker for H/C and team love.
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:35 am (UTC)
Thanks so much! I'm so glad you liked it. And yes, I think I probably will have a back story to this. (And I'm also a sucker for H/C and team love, so I'll write it every chance I get. ^_^)
Monday, October 18th, 2010 04:57 am (UTC)
Oh my. I'm SO intrigued now. :D

That was really well done! I loved it.
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:34 am (UTC)
Thanks so much! :D I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Monday, October 18th, 2010 02:12 pm (UTC)
I loved this so much. Poor Danny. I also love that Steve and Chin wanted to go after whoever hurt him. That's sweet.
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:35 am (UTC)
Thanks, hon! I'm glad you liked it. :D
Monday, October 18th, 2010 02:28 pm (UTC)
Very thought provoking.

Can I ask, do you have Danny being a victim of child abuse or are his scars from a cop related incident?

Great work :)
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:37 am (UTC)
Thanks! Glad you liked it.

And you can ask, but I'm honestly not sure of the answer. I go back and forth between the options... right now, I'm leaning more toward a cop-related incident, but there's something powerful about a guy who comes from an abusive home situation and not only thrives but works hard to be a fantastic father.

...What are your preferences? :D I'll take all the ideas I can get.
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 12:06 pm (UTC)
I am with you on loving the idea of Danny's coming from an abusive home and being determined that his daughter would have a better childhood then he did.
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 08:42 pm (UTC)
Fair enough. I'll keep that in mind. :) I woke up this morning leaning toward it being an on-the-job thing, but who knows what tomorrow's going to be like? ^_^ Curse my wish-washy muse...
Monday, October 18th, 2010 06:05 pm (UTC)
Fab stuff, although I am so intrigued now!!
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:37 am (UTC)
Thanks! :) That seems to be a common reaction... I'm thinking I'll have to write a little more. :D
Monday, October 18th, 2010 06:06 pm (UTC)
You're writing H50 fic! Awesome! I've read and really enjoyed your Star Trek fic, so I'm happy to see you writing for what's definitely become my latest fandom obsession too.

As for the fic, wow! So much emotion packed into just a few hundred words. Impressive! Also, I'm with those who've said they would like to read more. Kono may not want to know the story behind them, but I sure do.
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:38 am (UTC)
Aww, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :D And I think I'll have no choice but to write more... otherwise the readers may rise up and revolt. ;)
Monday, October 18th, 2010 06:37 pm (UTC)
Very interesting and intriguing story, I love you played it out. Is there any chance of a backstory for this '.'?
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:39 am (UTC)
Glad you liked it! :D And while I won't make any guarantees, I think there's a pretty good chance there'll be more in this particular story line, so keep your eyes peeled!
Monday, October 18th, 2010 09:58 pm (UTC)
Great drabble! Thanks for sharing it with us! ^^
Tuesday, October 19th, 2010 02:40 am (UTC)
You're welcome! :D Thanks for the feedback!
Wednesday, October 20th, 2010 06:24 am (UTC)
Oh ow, that drabble was lovely. Hopefully we can see an expanded universe for this :)
Tuesday, November 16th, 2010 09:02 pm (UTC)
This was really well written. I love the fact that there is mystery around Danny. He's the loudest and most vocal of the team, yet there's so much we don't know about him. This is an interesting foray into what could be a very interesting past. I truly hope you will enlighten us with the story of those scars. Again, very well done.
Friday, February 11th, 2011 03:39 am (UTC)
Thought you might like to know
your fic The ever-living ghost of what once was has been recced HERE (
at [ profile] h50_rec_room.
Monday, March 14th, 2011 06:33 am (UTC)
oh man i really hope you add to this. the idea of Danny coming from such a screwed up home and still being an amazing father is great.
Saturday, June 25th, 2011 08:36 pm (UTC)
I read your fic thanks to the rec over at the H50 rec room. I wonder what happened to Danny. You need to write another fic, where, for some reason, Steve and the team learn about it. And Steve and Chin could go talk to someone, and the team could comfort Danny.

I just realised I sound like a pushy H/C addict ...